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I Blame
softyetharsh

Good grief, it’s killing me.
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Destabilizes pressure to my heart
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Suffocates cycle of my breathing
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Chokes passage in my airway.
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Destabilizing.
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Suffocating.
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Choking.
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Do I need reiteration here?
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I huff, cough and scoff
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And you:
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A dose of my own medicine
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Now sick and tired, and preoccupied.
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I’m writing.
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30 Aug 10

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You use the words in the right way, loved it
 — Hulda

tnx hulda, i know despite its flaws. maybe will work on this sometime. :)
 — softyetharsh

...preoccupy-ed

; )
 — fractalcore

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