the coo-coo jar,
at the mutts
the crack !
too talk ohs
you cot me,
I'm feeling better now.
In honor of Fractalicious, Soul of Syros and that Crazy old man I call Bauer.
30 Aug 10
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let's make sense, together.
9-18, 22-24 are lovely a-loud, and if all this is meant to be is cool-sounding non-sense, you've most certainly managed that, friend. if this is supposed to capture a feeling other than the slick-shlack-slackity-wack-back of the rythym in yore hastle an deaf low, it don't, though
this goes to show that cool-sounding-lyric can be managed.
but more importantly this write is not me.
and that is why it has holes. o.O
so my theory has been proven. you can try to write like someone else, but in the end you're still yourself. (that was retarded)
Wait Frac...don't leave yet. I forgot to add a footnote. ^.^
honor & pleasure all mine,
ain't ye glad i didn't put no U in honor? U knows i ain't no landlubbin goldie.
i woldn't mind at all, althogh van gough woldn't be
in favour ouf that councept, aloung with soume
giger coure our outher, haha.
this isn't so bad, and maybe it's because it's easy to write when you're writing someone else's work -- you don't have to prove yourself cosmically or whatever. but, you still have to spiritually, so there's a spark of life in this which is nice to read. 'nice to read' means, for me, getting on the words like a magic carpet. 'look' is pretty neat.
actually bauer, i don't have to prove anything to anyone. i write what i write, when i want to write it.
i enjoyed writing this, and thought of you three when i wrote it.
i'm done saying words with wr. have a spectacular day. :)
nice poem, enjoyed reading
quite strange. I enjoyed it.
Thanks Web and RG.
And thank you too Bauer, for commenting. :)