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The Rocker
dmartin

Still water, a skating rink if it weren’t summer.
 1
In the distance rollin’ in, an angered cloud of concrete,
 2
a California bummer.
 3
August’s warm breath was circling, whistling in defense
 4
and all the while this legend wrestled
 5
with six strings and a conscience.
 6
 
 
An empty wooden rocker, more a man than a chair
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Strums along with an eye to the horizon,
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lathered dreads to match his Eastwood stare.
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That sandpaper face, a wrinkle for every year
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now hides the empty bottle of Jack,
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a reservoir for every fear.
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He hums heavily, patiently… waiting for the reaper
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as the trees fade to rusted shells;
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his pulse is racing, digging deeper.
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And this rusty old acoustic, prized possession and kindred soul,
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buried in it nearin’ five decades
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in water as good as any gravedigger’s hole.
 18
 
 
Play on, play on… through the streets into the suburbs.
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Through what used to be the old town square
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for the conscious children and the trash on the curbs.
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With contempt for the fiction that spans across the ocean
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and understanding that the truth is in the soundtrack,
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we’ve come to find that death may be the only true emotion.
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30 Sep 10

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The first part of the first stanza confused me, it lacks a reason to exist with the rest of the poem. After the first stanza the poem begins to work well. I would concentrate the poem more, it seems to wander around a bit, but overall it is interesting (after the first stanza).
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