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constipated cup of coughie
fractalcore

silence is beautiful
 1
like rest is --
 2
 
 
[tranquility]
 3
 
 
peace in torn pieces
 4
cuffs the hiccups.
 5




written 9/28/10
http://www.poetrycritical.net/read/65406/

thanks, softyetharsh.

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fractalcore
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10 Oct 10

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* cuffs the hiccups

love that.

fracky you always come up with the most intriguing lil writes.
— mandolyn         &nb sp;[!]

thanks, mandee.

*hiccups*

cuff, er 'scuze me.
; )
— fractalcore           [!]

there's a logical set in this, which might go, 'silence is to beautiful, as rest is to tranquility; as peace to torn pieces, as cuffs to hiccups.' -- that's more of a DNA sequence for the poem then this heavily sketched out roughs for the new mall.
— bmikebauer         & nbsp;[!]

nice. short and honest.
— RGJohnson         &n bsp;[!]

hello, mike.

one really runs into trouble if he deliberately forgets
about punctuation for awhile, eh? there's a full stop
after |2 and an imaginary [] around |3. your suggestion
is wise, but i'll punctuate this instead.

thanks.
; )
— fractalcore           [!]

how does it read now, mike?
: )
— fractalcore           [!]

RGJohnson,

thanks you.
: )
— fractalcore           [!]

er, thank* you.

mike, i'd like this to be black on white
rather than gray/white on white.

: )
— fractalcore           [!]

no, frac, i didn't mean that as the suggestion for how you should re-write the poem. it was a suggestion that there was more energy in this one then you're releasing.
— bmikebauer         & nbsp;[!]

oh, your 'DNA' to my 'constipated'? i see.
thanks for pointing that out.

i'll retain the punctuation, nonetheless.
; )
— fractalcore           [!]

yes, your punctu always is u. that's poetu.
— bmikebauer         & nbsp;[!]

how about pantone 6C?
— mandolyn         &nb sp;[!]

what if per-son-al-ity came in swatches? who whould mhiss out being madam chang kai check?
— bmikebauer         & nbsp;[!]

gross title. content balances it. tnx ;)
— softyetharsh          ; [!]

cull her

you're talking
color?

cool,
cooler,
coo,

lest eye blend
with hue.

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written 9/28/10
thanks, mandee.

; )
— noose_die_ve          ; [!]

oops,
sorry.

; )
— noose_die_ve          ; [!]

mike,
sometimes per-saw-nullity is a hoax.
; )
— fractalcore           [!]

softyetharsh,

'constipated' is there for a reason.
thanks again.

; )
— fractalcore           [!]
 — fractalcore

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