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If I got a quarter
 1
for every time I thought of you
 2
I'd be richer than Trump
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I saw you today
 4
and it sent a needle piercing through my stale heart
 5
as I managed to not even mutter
 6
'hello'
 7
 
 
I used to back down from myself when ever I was with you
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challenged
 9
you might say
 10
by my heart's bold and blind determination
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But today, today was a different day
 12
I saw you in the harsh light
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of the cruel hearted person you are
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That you really are
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The one you neglected to show me
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Or the one I was blind to not see
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But today when I saw you
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I did not back down
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or cover a frown
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but instead, stood up to myself and
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strutted on by like
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"look what you're missing"
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but I'm afraid you didn't see me
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for the girl I really am
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That I really am
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The one I forgot to show you
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The one you didn't look for
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The one you didn't want
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If I got a quarter for every time
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your face graced my mind
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your smile made me frown
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your laugh made me cry
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for every time
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I thought of you
 35
I'd be rich.
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2 Nov 10

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yowza yowza  . . . . yoza
 — unknown

Well then, youre both lucky.

Read nice.  Ending abrupt.  Liked the story, waited for the poetry.  

I like the fact that no poetry can be found in a story that has no poetry to it.

This makes it a poem to me.

Rated.
 — Haxxen

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