|without words: essay on an Edwardian asymmetrical
only an old hat can articulate
in wearing velvet. much posh
around its brim -
lightly promising forward
with a single surviving
16 Nov 10
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I think this is a great poem.
I was struck by the care taken with the title, use of “posh” in L3, inversion of the syntax in L6, the placement of “feather” alone on L8, as well as the great use of linebreaks and the shape of the poem
Were I to consider any change, it might be to insert a comma in L7 after “lightly”, but irrespectively, the poem works extremely well as it’s presented.
Thank you for this post.
i think the form of 'lightly' is to move the verb itself, overload it as a passive noun, a 'promising' as person in the poem, and not just a flavored pointer to feather. it's to endow feather with a face and personality, you might say. so, 'lightly promising' with the current of the poem, and isn't said from the shore.
Mike, I have to admit... that actually makes sense.
Thanks for the explanation.
Well written. Seems to hark back in near fashion to some early modern poetry, first half of the 20th Century. Imagism meets modern metaphysical poetry. Sorta like an "Emperor -- Just to Say".
[Such cross-dressing is actually appealing to my eye.]
Enjambment -- spacing/breaks -- execution are tops.
Worthy to be noted, re-read.
this is pretty good.
title is great
and l1 and 2 awesome
i felt it dwindled a bit after - but still an awesome poem.