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rain apostrophe bow
DeformedLion

picks and oinks and pisces
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and points
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your a series of endless
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thoughts.
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i like your slay and the melt
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of day watching shite
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dribble off vixen
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and a nibble of plight is all
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and all is right.
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i am a stray. i keep dogs. at bay
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their is a boat there is no moat,
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it surely floats like a stone in a
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goat, and then i looked at him and  
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'F-you mister man, your Plan and
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your fucking cool sunnies too!"
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and then i floored right out of dare.
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he soured at the thought of articulate prose.
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.../idanced/rainbows dew slight rainbow/quiver/time like falling leaves/hiss the branch atop a cradle of wind/small flies and tree-tops bend to/branch-break clatter/blue sky fooled against the darken-candled eye.
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there is death.
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drawing breath.
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my pencil breaks in a dream and my hapless penis
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bleeds, i sleep, i am dreaming tautologies against
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a fountanhead if fountanheads were shaped like soft, downy pillows, your feather float
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your tired and you wont dance
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with me and i cry
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and then...tears refract.
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i rain bow and blow.
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20 Nov 10

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my tongue feels much better after reading this. a little tired, but well exercised.
if rimbaud were into hip-hop and timothy levitch could be heard in the background on a mega-speaker-phone, it might resemble this.
 — unknown

i love the moment of "tears refract" in this.

will have to go look up tautologies.

"he soured...prose." hilarious, and well-supported in this nicely framed write.

nice little dance you got going here, Lion. (nicmichaels)
 — unknown

i never said, but it's beautiful.  

the dogs, the pencil...i am in love with your hapless penis.

bahahaha, damn i couldn't resist. lol
 — jenakajoffer

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