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bvbvdsfwefgw
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spill
 1
on the table
 2
 
 
son is playing with it
 3
making it larger
 4
 
 
i stand there conflicted
 5
and then encourage him further
 6
 
 
reluctant to deprive either of us of
 7
the occasional benevolence of chaos
 8
or the redemptive powers of evaporation.
 9


uniting surface areas

18 Dec 10

Rated 10 (10) by 1 users.
Active (1):
Inactive (1): 10, 10

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revised bp?  reads fairly the same
 — unknown

added more to highlight the adult and child perceptions of the world
 — unknown

zz
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Lovely capture of a moment.  I particularly like "the occasional benevolence of chaos."
The sonics in 8-10 are superb.
 — sybarite

now do "grand tunification theory". thanks.
 — unknown

tuna?
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thanks syb
 — unknown

Yes. A very well captured moment in the thought, and well considered writing of it.
Both charming and intelligent. Excellent.
 — jharrison

too abstract to attract interest let alone salary.
 — unknown

lol

lysol
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thank you
 — unknown

yes!


no
 — unknown

BS
 — funes

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