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never light hookah coals with gasoline
cubbzor

excuse the language, I blame the circumstances

Fuck! Fuck! Fuck! Fuck!
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I run for the garden hose.
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An ember snapped into
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a skipping flame, and is
 4
sprinting across the
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backyard patio. FUCK.
 6
The hose is kinking. Never
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buy hoses from Costco. My
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house is two steps away
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from not being a house.
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FUCK FUCK. Do I call
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the fire department? Don't
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have time. Jeff's battling it
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from the other side of the
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fence. His hose is kinking too.
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Fuck. WHERE THE HELL
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DID JORDAN GO? I can't
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do this. I can't do this. I
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can't do this. I can't do this.
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FUCK FUCK FUCK FUCK
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FUCK. Where the FUCK is
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Jordan? I tug at the hose
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until it works. We've got the
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fire cornered by the doghouse.
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The dogs will kill me if it
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burns down. I don't have
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doghouse insurance. We can't
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kill it, it keeps spreading as
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the gas canister keeps leaking.
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Jordan returns from behind
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the flamed fucker with the
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boldest bucket of water. Holy water.
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He finishes it off, we get burritos.
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19 Jan 11

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interesting read
 — unknown

thanks
 — cubbzor

Short story, not poem.  Fuck is terribly overused, learn new curse words to add to your swear repertoire!  Did you burn anything vital???
 — Isabelle5

My jacket and a blanket. Both used to contain the flame. Neither of them really worked, ha.

I guess I'm not too creative with curse words when there's a fire in my backyard. Fuck's the best go-to word.

Thank you for the feedback.
 — cubbzor

I like the over-use of "fuck."  I can't really think of anything else I would say in that situation.

Except for, "shit biscuits."  I always say that.
 — Darcy

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