...It feels like there are words missing from this? Is that purposeful? I love the effect of L6. Some lines were a real joy but overall this poem missed me. Nice ending notes though too. Highs and lows here, leave it out to dry for a while and then iron the wrinkles out and you'd have a great poem. Best wishes!
K — Known
best wishews to you too, mr. baggy pants — unknown
thanks Known for your scrutiny. it's all i could afford to edit at this time. Unknown, i dunno what to say to you :P — unknown