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my hair does not fall naturally upon my brow
unknown

hide intents
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provide refuge from the glare of passers by
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soften crooked clavicles
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or sway between sternum and breasts.
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no my hair is stubborn
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sparse and frayed.
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beholden to noone.
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proud to be a bitch
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(more than me)
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12 May 11

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so you're calling sybarite a bitch?
 — unknown

wtf? on all levels wtf...
 — unknown

Damn straight.  I like.  I embrace.  I am.
 — sybarite

First unk--methinks you possibly misunderstand..I do not think the author is calling me a bitch but is celebrating strong women.  
 — sybarite

Dammit--author reveal thyself!
 — sybarite

this should be suspended


i am offended
 — unknown

must be starr
 — unknown

Nope
 — unknown

Hmm....are you a Canadian?
 — sybarite

Nada
 — unknown

Brit?
 — sybarite

shiite
 — unknown

you added more stuff
 — unknown

I'll say.  I recant my former comments!  Ha!
 — sybarite

lol
 — unknown

I swear the boobies were sagging earlier....now they're timid?
 — sybarite

bad hair day can be a bitch
 — unknown

if u have fake boobs
they dont
 — unknown

Which--sag or become timid?  I can tell ya if I forked out a few grand for new boobies they sure the hell wouldn't be timid.  I'd be showin' to everyone!
 — sybarite

Titz
 — unknown

why the updates?
 — unknown

u need a haircut in qwait
 — unknown

harsh dude
 — unknown

thank you?
 — unknown

kewl
 — unknown

thanks
 — unknown

bitch yes but the question is are you a witch?
 — unknown

as I see no empirical connection to this Sybarperson, it must be an inside joke. I suggest people preface posting not meant for critique. hair today, gone tomorra.
 — unknown

lovelee
 — unknown

butt hair has its privileges
 — unknown

i love spam
 — unknown

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