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rainblow love
DeformedLion

guess i remember drunk,
 1
sloshed, turning coins into
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bottle-caps, slamming
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you into love  
 4
 
 
stumble into your bathtub,
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inspect the drain clogged hair,
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twisting like twits  
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and trap you in a sailor's knot
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tug you into my
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rainbow slot    
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"pull the lever"
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- would let you,
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though my voice would gravel,
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and your heart might scrape
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i would let the poodle
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lap on it, it likes to
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chew on your rags,
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says red tastes
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like fire.
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when i pushed you in,
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teeth chattered,
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till they started to fall out
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and i had to ask your
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mannequin to push
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them back in,
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but she is mute,
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not you
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standing still as a washing machine,
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not you,
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your mouth is definitely oral
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and when i see it
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creep on me
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my insides cream,
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you reach up through
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my glory hole,  
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with a teaspoon
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and steal me,
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gushing into
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your steaming tea.
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i told you once
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that your arm furs
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tickle and
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when i left that thought
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you turned into
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an animal,  
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snarling demented
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and yelping on
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my hapless rainbow,
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up i said
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and when my yellow stains
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wash out from me
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like nicotine
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you fold into my arms
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naked, so loved--
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mostly naked though,
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watching the clock
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tick you into midnight.
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4 Jun 11

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:) oh my, yes
 — ghost

ah you naughty you....
 — ghost

Where's jenkies?- i bet she'll live this one.
 — ghost

rainblow, lol...fuck yeah
i wonder what happens after midnight. :)

i love this, you're good.
 — jenakajoffer

i always clog the drain with all my hair.

by the way i read this from my phone earlier at the bar tonight while a live band screeched in my ears and the hockey men roared when we scored and i drank my beer smiling as i felt naked, so loved but mostly naked as the clock ticked me into midnight and my friend asked me what i was smiling about and i said i was having a poetry orgasm.
 — jenakajoffer

^^^ LOL
 — unknown

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