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chatting with a stranger on omegle
Sequiturist

back in the fall of 2009
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I had an hour long conversation with a stranger on omegle:
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a german man in his early 20’s
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working what he calls “the comatose shift”
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at some chain retailer
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& living in a like-minded barbed wire district
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on the outskirts of cologne.
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says he prefers to take his daily smoke breaks
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on a stone bridge
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running over a dried up riverbed covered in weed
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near his apartment complex
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& always grabs a liter or two of milk
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from the local grocer
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on his walk back
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because he once had the crazy idea
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that calcium will make him grow a little bit faster:
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perhaps blacken his lungs some years earlier
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& he's run with it ever since—
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tells me that he loves when good things go bad.
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he asked me whether america, real america
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is what wikipedia
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makes it out to be:
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the lady liberty, vast cornfields tinting the land a golden yellow,
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& hollywood cheekbones on plasma greens,
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to which I asked whether his cologne—
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streamlined arches & unworldly towers
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like those in the german expressionist film metropolis
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is really what the future looks like.
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& we both said no.
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"no, i'm sorry, but I have to go now. schoolwork to finish up
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& sleep & life to live..."
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when he wanted me to stay a while longer.
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asked for my name
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says he wants to get to know a real american,
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not the canon snapping breed who come for the upscale pubs
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& cathedrals from the ancient mornings
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when his people still had faith.
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I said no. to leave
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some emptiness: a bedroom window ajar in searching
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some sentimental distance
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that will let us forget the millions of rivers between us.
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4 Aug 11

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hmmm.../heads off to omegle. :)
 — unknown

i had no idea...
 — Sequiturist

porque no commentos?
 — unknown

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 — Sequiturist

Yeah I kinda dig this sort of poetry, interesting worldly experiences put into narrative.

I like your characterization.

I think "he's run with it ever since" reads smoother.

Litre* alwYs looks right to me, guess that's our differences right there :)

Thought a few spots need spit; as in, polish or perk up, some near the end was losing my interest a tad, but it was a nice read, thanks.
 — jenakajoffer

greats, thanks for the comments, jen!
 — Sequiturist

cool omegle poem. I had also written one a while back titled 'ASL?' check it out if you care to, this is much better imo...I'm not sure why but i got disinterested during the discriptions of the countries...it felt unnatural. i LOVE the end though. very nice exit note.
 — Known

tysm, Known. I made changes to the poem after reading your comments. :)
 — Sequiturist

I agree with Known.
 — unknown

poignant piece. bravo, mate!
 — unknown

I see you made changes. I like it.
 — unknown

:o
 — Sequiturist

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