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cage - (the doppler effect)

On your ribs
i fell asleep  
to the lullaby
of twin beats.
To skepticism
i woke;
were they racing
toward release
or deeper for
more protection?

27 Aug 11

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conversations are great. it unloads excess thoughts and break gaps. it allows further assessment on how things are gonna be. - corona
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needs more language color, better orchestration. think of Webern's "quartet"... you've mistakenly orchestrated this to be richard strauss.
 — trashpoodle

OR slouching towards bethlehem?  

your call.
 — DeformedLion


my mind wanders
 — unknown

does it wander in a box or in a cone? like, is your wandering directed by chance or by the way of nature? are you wearing clothing to protect you from embarrassment? or, are you naked because you know no one can see you anyway...

through that fog, your poem becomes the only you we can see at all.
 — trashpoodle

I bow to u trash. Master of verbal terrorism
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