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down my lonely alley
mrkhoo

a sleeping beggar
 1
by an empty trash can
 2
a mangy alley cat
 3
one angry madman.
 4
 
 
an insistent dealer
 5
a blaring cruiser
 6
a split second later
 7
mooncurser turned runner.
 8
 
 
a secluded corner
 9
stands a busy diner
 10
          with its neon sign that would
 11
          flicker
 12
          then die.
 13
 
 
through hollow handrails
 14
whirls the wailing zephyr
 15
that breaks out in gales
 16
of evil laughter.
 17
 
 
And I never knew that
 18
silence was a sound.
 19

30 Apr 04

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I meant for this little 'venture' to connect somehow or rather. I was hoping the reader could identify with loneliness in every stanza.
 — unknown

connect with loneliness. figured indentify sounded weird.
 — unknown

wow...dats so nice...
 — unknown

lack of feeling in the poem...i think u should refer more to better ideas but on the other hand good attempt
 — unknown

=)
 — lilminx506

i loved line 8 plus 18-19. great stuff. first stanza was kinda tricky at first.. but it exercises your mind. heh
 — unknown

The last stanza is very cool - u should recycle it 4 another poem! - i go for meanings in the poem and i cant quite figure this 1 out so not a huge fan.
 — J99

i didnt like it!!
 — unknown

It's original, I like it.  I think it's a plus that one can interpret it many different ways.
 — elliott3

You never knew that? Surprising. Wonderful poem.
 — borntodance

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