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Dawn
lalita

Heralding the dawn
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fairies dusting chains of love
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baby's breath awake
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15 Jun 12

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Very beautiful. It was really good to have something as nice as this to wake up to....Not as nice as my wife but lovely all the same

Larry who doesn't wear the trousers in his house Lark
 — larrylark

imagery is great! good job
 — gjenkins

Somewhat twee, forced and short. I would respect it more if you had an extra line, therefore daring  a greater justification for where your imagery intended to take you.
 — unknown

Thanks for your kind comments. To unknown, I feel that this says it all in the 5-7-5 haiku format, so I'm going to leave it alone.
 — lalita

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