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the urge-to-merge
AlchemiA

it's age-old
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-- where deep calls to deep --
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to surrender as a drop into a sea of bliss,
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which we feel as a rolling-swell
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                             in the beloveds kiss --
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the bliss of breaking through that barrier of self
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to become all,
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         beyond these filtering senses that call
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                                      us to our inner daemons,
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becoming the cosmic drunk with stars in our head
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                                    and oceans deep in our eyes,
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speechless with sympathies choking our throat, drowning in love 'cause there's no way to float...
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ღஜ-♥ to be alive like that,
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       with how our heart bends this whirl'd in its longing swell ♥-ஜღ
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27 Mar 13

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Good job!
 — Isabelle5

thanx Is-a-belle -- an echo pining for narcissus
 — AlchemiA

echo pining for narcissus
you encounter your image
in the mean-time, dream-time
in her eyes looking clear
inside of his own reflection
reflected again, farther then,
yet, longing to be near

let’s be an echo of each other, Sister and Brother…
 — AlchemiA

yes, your creativity is pulsing with potential and your voice is trembling to be heard; sing oh sis-star, in the language of the Sea, where you’re a drop in it’s blessed-infinity — sing like the Indians with their bhagwan songs, which move-us with the numinous in the language of devotion, in the rhythm of a longing heart, swelling on the edge of forever with an ancient ache, yearning with the urge-to-merge into a whirl’d where you end and love begins …
Sing my dear-heart, oh sing
 — AlchemiA

your poetry is always a riddle that i love to read and decipher.
 — raskolniikov

interesting Raskolnikov -- Abu Mūsā Jābir ibn Hayyān (al-Barigi / al-Azdi / al-Kufi / al-Tusi / al-Sufi), often known simply as Geber, (Arabic: جابر بن حیان‎) (Persian: جابرحیان) (c.721–c.815) etymology of gibberish, in which arcane mixtures, or as Vida alluded with 'darkly grace mixtures," that were know to have transmuting principals were obfuscated in Poetic fugues -- when his sonics rose in ebullience, in the rhythms that were known to open a portal, his visage would glimmer between worlds ...
 — AlchemiA

'ὁδὸς ἄνω κάτω μία καὶ ὡυτή" -- "the way upward and the way downward is one and the same." -- from a fragment of Heraclitus
 — AlchemiA

Sometimes your poetry is a little bit.....

I dunno....

Maybe a little bit too much --

Not accessible by the ordinary.

Alc, Is that a question you need to address -- you write beautifully but maybe step outside

:-)

Thanks for the read,
 — fortuitous

Once you had a poem that said .....something, something, something "you have me sons"

I can't remember it now but I connected with it --- I'd love to read it again

:-)
 — fortuitous

*gave*
 — fortuitous

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