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The Devil's Footprints
9

After an evening of irresponsible debauchery
 1
and general moral decay
 2
I stumble out of Rita's Tavern into the winter air.
 3
The neon marquee flashes red and yellow
 4
on a carpet of new snow.
 5
I defile the white earth with a transgression of footprints
 6
that lead to the hood of a Lexus
 7
on which I proceed to throw-up
 8
twenty-six dollars worth of mixed drinks.
 9
 
 
I make my way through the city,
 10
stopping at the entrance to Canaan Park.
 11
Two figures are out on the ice rink, skating -
 12
holding each other,
 13
keeping each other warm and sane and filled.
 14
My isolation is heightened by the sight,
 15
but I don't look away.
 16
 
 
I say a little prayer, nothing elaborate,
 17
just a few words to let God know
 18
I haven't forgiven him yet -
 19
but that I'm working on it.
 20

6 Sep 13

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10 from me
 — yield

Been there, done that. Every single line, back in my drinking days. Your words bring it all up again. 'Nother 10.
 — clupeidae

A big poem which i can strongly relate to
 — larrylark

Thank you 3.
 — 9

wow.

great title and poem. last two lines are wow in a whoa wow.
 — mandolyn

Never give up! Love and Light are there,
don't lose hope in the good and true.
 — 9

symbolism?
 — unknown

Love this one, 12-15, shit happens to me all the time. Good job.
 — 4st7lb

Beautiful writing from lines 1 to 6. 6 especially.
Not as deeply involved as your usual style, but I like this spareness ... it allows us to enter into places in the poem, sideways through the words, into the world you live :)

A good read.
 — jenn

Thanks jenn and 4st7lb
 — 9

got to me.
 — suedehead

Thank you. Me too.
 — 9

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