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Lucy goes for a picnic
sahibtorun

Lucy decided
 1
That she wanted to go for a picnic
 2
She opens her picnic basket
 3
And places
 4
A Japanese ham sandwich
 5
Inside
 6
It is wrapped tightly
 7
With some leftover
 8
Cling warp
 9
From yesterday’s
 10
Freshly baked cookies
 11
She likes the smells
 12
Of her food
 13
To intermingle
 14
“I wonder how, cookies and ham would taste like?
 15
I’m sure it would go very well with some wine”
 16
She places a bottle
 17
Of pot wine in
 18
Her picnic basket
 19
Along with two sets of
 20
Plastic cups
 21
She closes her picnic basket
 22
And puts on her mulberry coat
 23
She picks petit straw hat
 24
That matches her coat
 25
She made sure
 26
Her gloves
 27
Were snuggly on
 28
Before stepping out
 29
Of her honeydew colored home
 30
 
 
Lucy did not know
 31
Where to go
 32
For her picnic
 33
But she thought
 34
She will let
 35
The numbers decide today
 36
She took out
 37
Three dice
 38
From her coat pocket
 39
She kneel over
 40
Her welcome mat
 41
And rolled
 42
The dice on it
 43
The first die
 44
Just rolled over
 45
While the other two kept on spinning
 46
And spinning
 47
The first die
 48
Landed on three
 49
The other two
 50
Began to wobble
 51
The second die
 52
Landed at four
 53
The third die
 54
Landed at four as well
 55
Eleven in total
 56
“A master number”
 57
She said under her breathe
 58
She picked up the dice
 59
And placed them cozily
 60
Back into her coat pocket
 61
As she stood there wondering
 62
What the numbers could mean
 63
She could smell
 64
Lavender in the wind
 65
But there was no lavender
 66
In the meadow
 67
 
 
Lucy heads down
 68
To the train station
 69
The counter lady ask her
 70
Where she would like to go
 71
She thought to herself
 72
Eleven
 73
That is one
 74
Plus one
 75
That gives you two
 76
Two
 77
Two would be Arashi
 78
It can only be one place
 79
She looks at station clock
 80
She would reach just in time
 81
The numbers are never wrong
 82
“A round ticket to Paper Town in Arashi province please”
 83
She said without a smile
 84
Her grandmother said
 85
People with the prettiest smiles
 86
Hide the deepest secrets
 87
People always
 88
Found her pretty
 89
So she chooses not to smile
 90
 
 
Lucy did not sleep
 91
On the six-cabin train
 92
She loved staring
 93
Out the window
 94
Watching the autumn countryside
 95
Pass by
 96
The speed of the train
 97
Seemed to make
 98
The mountain glow
 99
From its orange leaves
 100
The leaves
 101
Reminded her
 102
Of her grandmother
 103
She used to help
 104
Her grandmother
 105
Rake fallen leaves
 106
Of the town shrine
 107
After the day was done
 108
They sit and rest on
 109
The steps of the shrine
 110
Her grandmother
 111
Would tell her stories
 112
Stories
 113
Of Spirits and Demons
 114
Of Vampires and Werewolves
 115
Of Dragons and Witches
 116
 
 
Lucy reached Paper Town
 117
As the sun began to set
 118
Paper Town was one of
 119
The riches in the region
 120
Its mountain is filled with gold
 121
The people of Paper Town were
 122
Wealthy and powerful
 123
But once a year
 124
On the autumn equinox
 125
Everyone touched by its wealth
 126
Is compelled to return
 127
The town will go into hiding
 128
At Twilight
 129
The curse of the town
 130
Would begin
 131
From its vast bamboo forest
 132
A Harvest Dragon would make
 133
Its way to Paper Town
 134
The Harvest Dragon loves to feast on greedy souls
 135
That is the price for all their gold
 136
No matter how rich they maybe
 137
When twilight comes to be
 138
For day to mirror night
 139
They could never leave this fright
 140
 
 
Lucy heard the cries of
 141
The Harvest Dragon coming from
 142
The Bamboo forest
 143
She heads towards
 144
The edge of Paper Town
 145
The Rustling of the forest
 146
Grew louder
 147
And louder
 148
Suddenly the Harvest Dragon leap
 149
From the Bamboo Forest
 150
Into the sky
 151
Bringing with it a gust
 152
That could flipped cars over
 153
Its wingspan was wider
 154
Then six-cabin train
 155
Its scales was just like the orange leaves
 156
That made the mountain glow
 157
The Harvest Dragon landed
 158
On a marble mansion
 159
Its chest began to resonate
 160
The vibrations drawing out
 161
The greedy souls from
 162
The Marble Mansion
 163
 
 
Lucy ran towards the Harvest Dragon
 164
As close as she could
 165
But as far as she should
 166
She removed
 167
Her snugged glove
 168
She whispers a chant
 169
A bolt of lightning zipped
 170
From her tips of finger
 171
To the face of the dragon
 172
Only inches shy of its eye
 173
The Harvest Dragon roared
 174
And gave chase
 175
Before she could have another shot
 176
She knew that she is not strong
 177
But she knows the numbers were never wrong
 178
Blessed with the wind
 179
Beneath her feet
 180
She ran into the bamboo forest
 181
Up the mountain
 182
Away from Paper Town
 183
 
 
Lucy only heard silence
 184
In the Bamboo Forest
 185
She thought
 186
She was far enough
 187
So she stopped to take
 188
Her bearings but
 189
That was a mistake
 190
The Harvest Dragon
 191
Was too stealth and too close
 192
Her body is paralyzed
 193
By the vibrations emitted
 194
From the Harvest Dragon
 195
It lands in front of her
 196
All she could do is stare
 197
Into its eyes
 198
The eyes she missed blind
 199
It wants her flesh and her soul
 200
The Harvest Dragon lowers
 201
Its resonating grip
 202
And open its jaw wide
 203
Its throat began to brew fire
 204
Her body was still numb
 205
But she still could feel
 206
The cold wind blow
 207
There was lavender in the wind
 208
But there was no lavender in the forest
 209
 
 
Lucy summon
 210
All the courage
 211
From all her past lifetimes
 212
She reaches into her picnic basket
 213
She grabs the plastic cups
 214
She flings them
 215
Into the Jaws
 216
Of the Harvest Dragon
 217
The plastic cups
 218
Vaporized into fumes
 219
The fumes
 220
Choked the Harvest Dragon
 221
Freeing her from
 222
Its resonating grip
 223
She fled
 224
Following the trail
 225
Of lavender in the wind
 226
She stumbles upon a dilapidated shrine
 227
There were lavender incense
 228
Freshly burning from the shrine
 229
She thought someone has been
 230
Praying for her
 231
 
 
Lucy walks into the shrine
 232
The Shrine is decked
 233
With Sangaku Tablets
 234
Mathematical offerings
 235
To the Gods
 236
For bestowing Genius
 237
The Circles, the Triangles
 238
And the squares
 239
They were centuries old
 240
There were eleven Sangaku Tablets
 241
Soon the tablets begin to melt
 242
The Harvest Dragon was baking
 243
Her from the outside
 244
The gust of wind and fire
 245
Pressing down on the shrine walls
 246
Hidden behind the melting circles
 247
Was a Katana
 248
She grabs the Katana
 249
And held it tightly to her chest
 250
The blade was older
 251
Then her bloodline
 252
She chants a protection spell
 253
And with the wind beneath her feet
 254
She leap through the melting roof
 255
High into the sky
 256
 
 
Lucy could see
 257
The moon casing its light
 258
On every corner of the Region
 259
Its laminating blanket
 260
Seems to keep world in slumber
 261
Unaware of the monster below
 262
She falls back down
 263
Landing gently on its head
 264
She places the tip of the blade
 265
On the scales that was just like
 266
The orange leaves
 267
That made the mountain glow
 268
She began prayer that was just like
 269
Those in her grandmother stories
 270
Stories
 271
Of Spirits and Demons
 272
Of Vampires and Werewolves
 273
Of Dragons and Witches
 274
She thrust the blade that was
 275
Older then her bloodline into
 276
The head of the Harvest Dragon
 277
And with that appeared
 278
The Circle, the Triangle
 279
And The Square
 280
That were centuries old
 281
Binding wings of the Harvest Dragon
 282
That was longer than
 283
A six-cabin train
 284
The Harvest Dragon struggle
 285
To break free
 286
But the Shapes of Sangaku
 287
Rolled it up into a ball of light
 288
Both of them
 289
Decent slowly to what is left
 290
The depilated shrine
 291
The ball of light
 292
Transforms into an egg
 293
A Harvest Dragon egg
 294
 
 
Lucy opens her picnic basket
 295
She takes out her Japanese Ham sandwich
 296
She places the bottle of pot wine
 297
Beside the sandwich
 298
She takes the Harvest Dragon egg
 299
And places it into her picnic basket
 300
She sits on ground
 301
She unwarps the cling wrap
 302
From her Japanese Ham Sandwich
 303
She takes a bite
 304
The smell of cookies and ham
 305
Began to intermingle inside her mouth
 306
She pops open the pot wine
 307
And takes a sip
 308
The pot wine goes very well
 309
With the sandwich that taste of
 310
Cookies and ham
 311
 
 
Lucy is happy
 312
She feels like she is having
 313
The perfect picnic party
 314

9 Jan 14

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cling wrap not cling warp in line 9 dummy.
 — unknown

Way too much repetition for the form. It's pure prose stretched down the page.
 — jenn

Yikes!  The neverending poem!  This HAS its moments, but it goes on and on and pretty much keeps saying the same thing(s) over and over again.  If u cut out 1/2 of what's consistently repeated, you'd be amazed at how much better this piece would become.  As it is, it's not very digestible and for myself, tried my patience (and I have the patience of a saint) just getting all the way through it.  It's annoying, I think, but again, has its moments of merit, so don't take this too much to heart.  Maybe do some serious editing.  :-)
 — starr

Hi, I didn't mind it. It has a child like innocence that has some appeal. It's not really poetry though - prose disguised as poem by short lines. If you edit it you might want to start by making a decision as to past or present tense because you can't really have it both ways. - Scott.
 — scottnoidea

Too long, too mundane, too much detail, boring, not even a good ending.

Perhaps you should try children's books instead of poetry.  Or perhaps you had a little too much "pot" wine!
 — Isabelle5

Thx guys. For the comment. I will take it into consideration.
 — sahibtorun

the title of this reminds me of a Little Bear episode, which is nostalgic and heartwarming for me....

but...

i didn't get further than line 67, it was just pissing around too much and couldn't bother waiting for the point.  sorry, no offense :)
 — jenakajoffer

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