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memory
kripto

A memory
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fleeting from existence
 2
present for only a moment
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and after all, it's gone
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Those who basked in the glow
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of the faded memory
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hold the only proof of its existence
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Still
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it stays
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locked away in few minds
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As memory continues on
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following the patterns of nature
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decaying
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Such as a flower torn off its stem
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fallen
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left on dirt
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every passing day
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The moment is remembered less and less
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Forgotten with every year that passes
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Details fade
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leaving a skeletal shell of what is soon to be extinct
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However, proof still remains as fossils in the brains of the few
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And it shall remain until the last person fades away  taking the lost memory along with them into the forgotten
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9 Jan 14

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wow
 — unknown

HI, Kripto. Just a few suggestions. Firstly, since you aren't using punctuation you really don't need to capitalize every line. It's distracting and doesn't help the reader with your rhythm or pace. Secondly, you might consider shortening your lines, essentially breaking them in half.

Just suggestions. Thank you for sharing.
 — Aish

Avoid cliche like, "Soul."
 — Cerulise

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