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mandolyn

you love me under unknown.
 1
my poetry is different there, more alive
 2
more like you.
 3
 
 
your eyes have never been black
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like your coffee, you just like saying that.
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and they don't blink like the big hand
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on my kitchen clock. i just like looking at them.
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they unbutton my smile –
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my chipped tooth feels prettier
 9
after the trill in your voice unclothes it;
 10
my mouth is naked around you.
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i will never tell you who i am
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when i retreat to anonymity.
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maybe that is why i love the darkness
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and refuse to add windows to our saga.
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there was a time
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i wanted you to hold me like
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you hold the body of your twelve string,
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but i wanted your eyes open-
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it's the only way
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i can still see the sky
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without having to mess with the blinds.
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11 Apr 14

Rated 10 (10) by 3 users.
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did you mean thrill in 10?
 — unknown

^ no, it's trill. :)
 — mandolyn

How'd I miss this? Damn fine acting. You should get a golden globe.
 — yield

Sorry. That was mean. I don't know what to say at times.
 — yield

This could begin at L16. Good allover anyhow.
 — unknown

^^ doesn't bother me. i know why you do it. we are dangerous together :-/

^ it could! you are so right. hm...
 — mandolyn

Your book there con net q cialis is for a generic cover, left, to return, they rely on more expensive.  
 — unknown

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