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Timeline of Uncertainty
kripto

I am in a shadow, stuck searching within
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released to the day, the sun
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The sun settling, rays upon my cheek
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As I take my first steps
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Steps upon this
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This reality
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This vision
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For I can not see
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blinded by dumb serenity
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Bliss, TVs and computer screens
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Life dwindling away, As we sit time away
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As I sit here pressing these keys
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each key another wasted second
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The Clouds keep moving as the Earth continues to orbit
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nothing is changed, words are spoken people die
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And especially now, death has no time for boredom
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All this action, movement and history making has Kept us all busy, and easily oblivious
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for, all, simply remains the same
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A vain moment for pretentious life
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War, War may evolve, but War never changes
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And the World continues and will still continue well after our days
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Let us die in ignorance, for we constitute barely
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A speck
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28 Apr 14

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freshly edited
 — kripto

There's a lugubrious apathy in this, which occasionally flips on the nihilism switch, that I quite like but it doesn't have the anger, the resentment, the screaming into the void that I think it needs to really give it some belly punches.

The double 'War, War' repeat isn't really needed, and to be honest the 'War never changes' part sounds like something out of the Fallout series of games.

Infinite regression perspective is a dangerous path to walk down, but an illuminating one, all the same :)

An ok read that needs more fire in the furnace to incinerate.
 — jenn

another edit, line add
 — kripto

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