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this hour lasts forever
exparadise

straight on shadowed secrets
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i hear you scream
 2
with visions of lusting boys,
 3
wide eyes touching every inch
 4
   of your body
 5
 
 
penetrating your eyes
 6
cold dead fingers
 7
groping through your pockets
 8
slender hands, grasping at what
 9
was once promised to me
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it occurs to me again
 11
forever is never forever
 12
and always will always be a lie
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and such an irony i now see
 14
when human lips form the word "love"
 15
 
 
and now you want me to have what's stolen
 16
you want me to join the multitude
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and in a very calm way
 18
i'd rather swallow
 19
  thirty two sleeping pills
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14 Oct 02

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damn..this is amazing...

that isn't even a suitable word...in fact, no word i can think of captures this the way i want it to
 — unknown

Yeah. this is good, but not GREAT...it needs more...
 — Moose

this is damn decent poetry. it is bitter in just the way I like.
 — rafter

I have a friend exactly in this place.
 — unknown

I'm in the Good group. This was so different and the ending is a surprise.
 — Isabelle5

i love the last stanza. definitely the last two lines.
 — shakeit

suck
 — unknown

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