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oil
unknown

the shine that crowns
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reflects its queen-
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sized olive slime
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shed from the roots
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tangy in brine
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pores open wide-
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mouthed fit for a king
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*soothing [the] divine masculine energy


17 May 15

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ah, this met expectations -- it's rich and cream-filled writing about 'oil' and that's what it should be  -- it's oily writing, thick and viscous and that's kind of like poetry and maybe it is poetry.
 — cadmium

Why
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Thanks!
 — unknown

There's literally nothing to even critique here. Minimalism is one thing, and I'm all for simplicity and being concise, but there's nothing to glean from this at all.
 — Inuki

this one got deleted down -- the author maybe started conceptualizing the content and reduced it? or, maybe, to get down to it, 'refined it'?

interesting.
 — cadmium

The post needed a breather. Pardon for its temporary invisibility. I appreciate your feedback.
 — unknown

humm... i've forgotten the first post. is this identical? it doesn't seem to be...
 — cadmium

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