the shine that crowns
reflects its queen-
sized olive slime
shed from the roots
tangy in brine
pores open wide-
mouthed fit for a king
*soothing [the] divine masculine energy
17 May 15
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ah, this met expectations -- it's rich and cream-filled writing about 'oil' and that's what it should be -- it's oily writing, thick and viscous and that's kind of like poetry and maybe it is poetry.
There's literally nothing to even critique here. Minimalism is one thing, and I'm all for simplicity and being concise, but there's nothing to glean from this at all.
this one got deleted down -- the author maybe started conceptualizing the content and reduced it? or, maybe, to get down to it, 'refined it'?
The post needed a breather. Pardon for its temporary invisibility. I appreciate your feedback.
humm... i've forgotten the first post. is this identical? it doesn't seem to be...
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