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Dispassionate
Brandxxx

I’m standing again on the gravel pathways
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Along the steel lines of the track
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Underneath a pink masterpiece sky
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Listening closely to the calming peace
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Of a carefully selected album
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Alone in the mood of a thousand days
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Acquired to live this chosen way
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I am my own man built to survive
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And this is the way I told you it would be
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So don’t look at me with those damning eyes
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And expect me to shed a compassionate tear
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When the future is taking hold just like it was told
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With steel skin and adverse ways
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Step aside or be stepped upon
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With a soul so sweet you should leave before
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The mirrors shatter completely
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And I am staring so blankly at your expectant face
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I may not be happy but at least I don’t care
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17 Jun 04

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This is much more beautiful than most dispair can reclaim. Sometimes poems this short are not complete and finished. This however seems complete in all senses.
 — pennylane

thank you very much pennylane im glad you liked it
 — Brandxxx

i liked this one, it seems cold, but i enjoyed this
 — Drastic

Well thanks for the comments Drastic.
 — Brandxxx

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