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Stemming off...Into Vague Possibility
Brandxxx

Feinting Reality for the sake of this man
 1
I see in the mirror tonight
 2
I wonder if I ever cared to survive
 3
Past this age of love and despair
 4
 
 
Dark gray clouds asking permission
 5
To bring the rain
 6
And always pain in the muddled sky
 7
Lying steadily in the face of everybody,
 8
Who just doesn’t notice the grace
 9
In these off colored days of our lives
 10
 
 
I let someone tell me I was wrong about things
 11
I knew what to say to face my ignorance
 12
I fell in front of the crowd
 13
I laughed my pain away to save my face
 14
I never wondered about so many things
 15
 
 
If I go to sleep, will people leave behind me?
 16
Does anyone ever wonder just how it is,
 17
A man could love someone for so long
 18
Like I have
 19
Do they wonder
 20
How I’m doing about the aftermath
 21
 
 
I
 22
Guess it doesn’t matter to matter to anyone
 23
So if they ask if there is something wrong
 24
Like I know will never be
 25
I just shake my head and stare at the ground
 26
Try and keep it for myself
 27
Without tearing the fabric
 28
And leaving a window
 29
For my heart to scream through
 30
 
 
Someone told me I was wrong
 31
About things
 32
About things
 33
Concerning existing with love in the matter
 34
Of possibility
 35
About things
 36
About how facing tragedy with hope
 37
Now
 38
I think I will always miss
 39
My certainty.
 40

21 Jun 04

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kind of long but good. there were a few lines i didn't think fit and each stanza seems independent from the rest of the poem.
 — Drastic

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