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fractalcore

vessel holds,
 1
light spills over
 2
yonder --
 3
 
 
no water where i am,
 4
but content meant
 5
'lost and found':
 6
 
 
vessel folds,
 7
light sails on
 8
forever...
 9



i still really suck at this, but what the hell...

thank you, universe!


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fractalcore

31 Jan 16

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hi fractalcore,

your titles are always in italics. that's a good idea and humble in a way. thus any regular readers always know they are yours and don't have to read if they don't want to?  

i have no clue why you do it...just guessing.

vessel is quite abstract and i don't get anything in the way of concrete image here.

it's like an air poem with no anchor.

water and light as a metaphor with no context if that makes sense?

i won't rate this one
 — PollyReg

lost and found is ironic.

lol. let's stick with lost...for this one
 — PollyReg

Hey fract, nice to see you :)
Nice little poem, I enjoyed the sail. Very iridescent.
 — jenakajoffer

10 always fracking
 — unknown

Welcome back frac =)
 — Known

Where's your "white" swan??
 — unknown

The title of this is quite intriguing...I must ponder & wonder longer. bbl
 — Known

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