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Passion Overflow
PaleHorse

She spins tangos on the phonograph
 1
as I walk in the door
 2
- undresses my day
 3
with the apron bow
 4
in the small of her back.
 5
 
 
She’s been cooking again.
 6
 
 
Recipe cards like dance floor stickers
 7
litter the living room floor,
 8
calescent scents of 'Beurre Noisette'
 9
permeate the flat.
 10
 
 
She is chasséing me to the nook.
 11
 
 
Three kirs down, prepositions
 12
turned to propositions
 13
as fall provenders drown
 14
in a copper kettle
 15
nestled in the sink.
 16
 
 
More talk, with less words
 17
and she’s already
 18
unshackled my suspenders
 19
to my thighs.
 20
 
 
Prater falls
 21
at the decoction of her lips,
 22
and stove top cocotte
 23
warms on electric red coils
 24
as we fall into
 25
'Coquilles Saint-Jacques'.
 26








...and inspired by a Jack Vettriano painting.

1 Feb 16

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Saucy!

I'm sure after reading this poem your subject will be back in the saddle, ponyboy.
you are ablaze of glorious words. What I love most, aside from the romantic-eroticism, is the vintage imagery-- the flat, the slacks and suspenders, aprons with the bow, haha, so much fun.
Line 10 is so sensual and mouthwatering but it's too late for a trip to the chocolatier :(

I'm going to try and find which print it was. :)
 — jenakajoffer

Flattering!
 — Known

Undress my day...best line ever.

this could very well be my new fantasy marriage. I think I'm going to marry this poem.

I do! :)

(Line 1 is your title, you've never done that before so I wonder if you were just posting quickly and didn't notice.)
 — jenakajoffer

fixed
 — unknown

7-Recipe cards dance like stickers
 — Known

Changed my mind. Keep it. Lol.
 — Known

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