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You're no Daniel Day-Lewis but at least you're Irish
jenakajoffer

First man to worship my feet
 1
shucked sixteen pounds for a rickshaw
 2
too drunk to walk on Magner's.
 3
 
 
You carried me to the fair, three miles
 4
of sweat, a swan with one wing,
 5
a mansion on the bank
 6
and two freckled eggs—
 7
 
 
lips nuzzling the neck of a stout man
 8
as you slumped on a bench
 9
easing between the breasts
 10
of a beautiful girl—
 11
 
 
didn't you know I had a lover back home?
 12
 
 
I fell in love with the world
 13
and nearly for you when you tongued
 14
the soles of my shoes, crimson red
 15
 
 
like the first rush of blood
 16
when I stepped off the plane, thighs
 17
flushed with fever—
 18
 
 
you got hard and I poked fun
 19
as the cider bottles tipped. I wanted to
 20
Riverdance but I was afraid I’d soil my taps
 21
in that murky canal— will you forgive me?
 22
 
 
O' my Guinness-lipped potato lover,
 23
when will we return to the Mogg?
 24
I want to drink with the trannies,
 25
sing a night in Soho—
 26
I want to plant your scraggy roots
 27
in my dark earth, one more time.
 28

17 Mar 16

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Happy St Patricks day :-)
 — PollyReg

Happy St. Paddy's Polly!
:)
 — jenakajoffer

my work put on a lunch thing. black pudding (ick) and green trifle

I like l4-7 in this poem. I like a random fair. Cheers.
 — PollyReg

black pudding ew!

i'll take pudding in a glass though!

thanks polls, cheers!
 — jenakajoffer

I'm only 50% Irish, so can't deliberate on the lingo. But 100% sure I like it.
 — sixtywatt

Nice depiction of your thoughts on Ireland, liked the Ireland Forever tag.

I am bit confused with some of the descriptions used though. I don't know if your intent was to limit this piece to just Ireland or include England (London to be exact).

Here is why- Line about trannies and Soho - where you referring to London or the Soho Pub in Cork (the latter has no tranny population to speak of as the former does) Also- the rickshaw line feels more like London- with all the petty cabs there,
Lastly tthe name of the poem, Daniel Day Lewis does hold Irish citizenship he is an English actor born in London

I just ask because it seemed the poem was set fourth to honor Ireland, but appears to have  blended elements in common with London.

Two entirely different cultures.
 — unknown

hi,

the poem is really about a person, not a place, hence the title.

girl falls in love with an Irishman while visiting London. Girl loves Daniel day Lewis but the wee chap comes a close second; he may not have Dan's baby blue eyes or his striking poise, at least he's Irish.

I appreciate your knowledge on two of my most favourite places in the world, thanks for reading :)
 — jenakajoffer

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