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you and you
cadmium

bill yeats, when old,
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tried popular song --
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he got it wrong.
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so, who am i to try?
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just a vocabulary user,
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erotomanic loser,
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and, poetic small fry:
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thus, am i.
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but, I'll try a little song
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in rhyme, to catch your eye...
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(as you dance by,)    
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        -- and, maybe you'll
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       reciprocate,
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       not refrigerate...
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but,
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what do I know?
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...
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what do I know,
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or, what can I do...
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thinking of you and you.
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how do I cry,
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narcissistic-ly die,
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living the lie
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of you and you.
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...
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see you
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on the
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radio,
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singing to yourself...
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what kind of love
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for a girl and guy?
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just hearing you sing from a shelf?
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...
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who do i love, and,
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who can i know? --
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passing you by,
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i'm just another joe --
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walking alone,
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singing to myself,
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about you and you.
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23 Mar 16

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I'm in.... ~forbster
 — aforbing

cadmium has up and forgot about me and me. Ach, just as well, we could never play nicely together anyhoo...;-)
 — PollyReg

bump
 — cadmium

wording change. aug 10, 17
 — cadmium

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