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When We Broke in Shock and Disbelief
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I want to suck your hair like a cat,
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choke on a hairball and ruminate it like a cow,
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your essence my cud, my cure, my hobby.
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Too far now to smell the back of your neck
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and the sweet spot where thigh meets scrotum
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and watch your hands moving tan on white, black on pink
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as we envelope, lick each other like stamps
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that our life sends out like packages labeled
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crudely, "Fragile, do not drop, do not shake."
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After years of practice, I fumble, drop us,
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hear us shatter as we reach for each other,
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hands slippery with memory and
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disappointments,
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lies lubed with KY tongue gel.
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We watch pieces of us that were precious
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become road kill, become litter
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on the edges of our dream.
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We taste it together, still conjoined
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like a freak Cupid put together badly
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- primordial, back of the throat endings
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saying we have evolved as far as we can and here (it/we) end.
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We do this badly, faces turned away and blank,
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voices broken like glass
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and shards will follow us, we will never heal.
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I need you to make me strong,
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you need me to keep you brave.
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From far away, I feel you raging,
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you hear me crying,
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we do not follow our umbilicus
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to its frayed breaking point.
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It's over, we are puzzled, paralyzed
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and learning that even beautiful dreams
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can wither and die of loneliness,
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unable (unwilling) to be revived.
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23 Apr 16

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