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Zingerman's in Heaven
aforbing

I wish I could send Zingerman's to Heaven
 1
where the souls could nosh at will
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Gram would cut equal pieces,
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making sure all got their fill.
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All would find something to love
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in that crate and I know that for
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all those below and above
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memories would surely abound
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I wish I could send Zingerman's to Heaven
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even just once a year
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sending departed loved ones,
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a bit of Christmas cheer
 12
 
 
Lord knows we need something
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to believe in--to hope for,
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a place of center
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to revolve around...
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I wish I could send Zingerman's to Heaven
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although it wouldn't bring world peace...
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Yet still I would pack it and ship it
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If only it would bring you back to me.
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www.zingermans.com

6 Dec 16


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Anyone??
 — aforbing

I'm struggling with the flow of this one. It started with an ABCB  rhyme that didn't continue. It was jarring when that and the meter of the first stanza dissolved into a less structured piece. The idea is sweet, but I've seen you write much cleaner poems in terms of structure or no structure.
 — akiikii

Never mind. Sloppy first read. I see the pattern and purpose of its dissolution now. It's nice. Is Zingerman's a sweets shop?
 — akiikii

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