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I need some alcohol in my system like NOW!
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I'm a cast away
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of my own lust
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for liquid vixen.
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For I'm lingering
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in a shitty apartment
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full of invisible porn
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and dust.
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straight shot, just a sip
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all at once.
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For an hour or two
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I may believe it's
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better than my depression meds
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when I'm done.
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I like to pretend" today
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is better than yesterday"
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as it is written on my wall.
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18 Feb 17

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This is tits.

If you ever wanna just grab a beer, talk, I'm 60W
 — unknown

I avoided reading this a few times, thinking it was going to be juvenile. I was so wrong! This is a brilliant poem. Concise, but vivid, and wonderful use of the word. The title does not allude to how clever this piece is, and because of that, the title itself has a visceral cleverness to it. Kudos!
 — dannyprice

I think l13 is a tag a lag. Not needed.

I'm interested in the invisible porn bit. What?

Can a person be so depressed that porn goes invisible?

thanks for the read,
 — PollyReg

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