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the manic synesthesiac
AlchemiA

we're gathered in the light
 1
with a Lunar whim and the colours
 2
resolved and separated
 3
along the arc of your falling curve
 4
as either particle or wave
 5
 
 
I lick the flame, a bated breath
 6
an elemental need of your nether world
 7
where stirs a glowing passion
 8
for us to burn again
 9
 
 
gathering our attentions
 10
to the tensions rousing just below
 11
with emotions cum hesitations and then
 12
a transcendental drift, though a narcissism
 13
runs a schism relentlessly through it
 14
 
 
we dive deep together
 15
until after we've 'come'
 16
to our separate desperate ways;
 17
a sycophant to a sociopath
 18
a bleeding on the edge of pain
 19
a paradise of ave Maria
 20
where we arouse it all over again
 21
 
 
rapt inside with syn-aesthetic invigoration's
 22
overflowed, swelling, mingling
 23
with restless moaning, frisson tingling, emptying,
 24
a flower opens from the depths of your Sea
 25
with absolute surrender, stuttering, ecstatically
 26
 
 
i remember she cries, lightning in her eyes
 27
stars in her head, our rhythm makes a song
 28
echo to the Tombs of the Nile Kings
 29
shuddering their vessels to forever
 30
 
 
then it fell apart, everything closed down again,
 31
too much, too much made me blind
 32
the lows, frowning unkind, shut my mind
 33
    with nothing more to say
 34
just those dense particles that bend me like they always do
 35
bent to the gravity of a deeper darker end,
 36
where it fell apart again, like it always does,
 37
like I never saw anything at all...
 38

9 May 17

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wut?wow!
 — unknown

very nice.  although I read line 5 as:  'as either particle or wave'
also, I read 35 without "over"
otherwise, sublime
 — JKWeb

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