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I am the snow on your roof in winter
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and I’m dormant under the icy bright moon
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I peek over the gutters
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trying to catch a glimpse of you
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I hope you feel the water
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cold in my veins
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the rush of blood
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the snow-capped mountain top
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this storm of obsession
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brisk down your razorback spine
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until the weather warms
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when the sun becomes dominant
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I’ll slowly slide
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down the side of your house
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to sleep in your garden
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and dream of a time
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when we’re alone under tombstones
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25 May 17

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We are but a mere moment twix cradle and grave.

Larry funereal Lark
 — larrylark

L17 says too much///
Alternative ending suggestion ---
we'll be alone
under stone
 — unknown

typical unk. doesn't know how to read. the 'tombstones' is inside the melody. you want a telegram to yourself, get  someone to die.
 — cadmium

Brilliant poem :)
Love how you’ve ended this.
 — jenakajoffer

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