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i'll TELL you what. (A)
gnormal

the attitude with which we walk about.

i understand why i am here.
 1
i know what to do.
 2
i know how to show people why they should like me.
 3
my life is well balanced.
 4
i can give you some advice.
 5
i have plenty of time.
 6
i am comfortable in most conversations.
 7
i look forward to talking to strangers.
 8
i have it all together, just a little more than you.
 9
what, this old thing?
 10
 
 
i am comfortable.
 11
i love very well.  thank you.
 12
only smart people know how smart i am.
 13
i have many secret valuable business ideas.
 14
i'm an excellent driver.
 15
i became bored with chess.  i'm working on my second book.
 16
i'm ahead of the schedule i've made for myself,
 17
     thanks to good weather.
 18
if you spied on me, you'd be impressed.
 19
i know you have seen the way i step into my car.
 20
 
 
i chuckle about my past, with which i am satisfied.
 21
i was there long ago, before the way was paved.
 22
i did that years ago, when it was more difficult.
 23
my wild and crazy days were embarrassingly wild.
 24
i have misplaced the awards i've received.
 25
i can drink more than you, but i've got to get up early
 26
     and take advantage.
 27
i like you.  you remind me of me
 28
     when i was less developed.
 29
 
 
i exercise for two hours every day, but i took today off.
 30
i watch less tv than you, and read more.  always have.
 31
this pda was a gift.
 32
ask anyone who knows me.
 33

1 Nov 02

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I like it paired with part B, but it doesn't work as well on its own, while part B I believe does.
 — abby

i really like "i love very well. thank you." but the rest seems lacking.
 — username

Ahhh, the cliches by which we live our lives.
 — Lossandra

yes!
 — unknown

The attitude with which we "strut" about, maybe.....
I liked the bitchy "i'm better than you" attitude. And it reads surprisingly well for all the repeating "I"s
 — silly

hearts

-mangina
 — unknown

How arrogant and eloquent.  I didn't know that was possible.
 — themolly

how did i miss this one???

gnormal you make me wish i was older so i had more and more clever ideas for poetry.

you've got to see the other part of this, too to get the complete idea (even though both stand well enough on their own)

yeah, TELL me about it (B)

about type A and B personalities i think.

excellent driver, rainman.  :)
 — root

  very much  smart n comfortably simple, thou too much egocentric !  like lines 12 n 13
 — PASSWARZ

ha...I guess I am type A
 — nightengale

straight from the treasure chest.
: )
 — fractalcore

"i know how to show people why they should like me.
i can give you some advice.
i am comfortable in most conversations.  
i look forward to talking to strangers.  
i have it all together, just a little more than you."

- true indeed!
 — unknown

you just found a great gem there, unky.
the author rocks.
: )
 — fractalcore

I'LL TELL YOU THIS
fractalcore

green peas in tortured can: the
peace corps guy's accusations

i am the speye in the sky
who doesn't brush his teeth unless i wasn't
meeting the president

coo through the harp, ooh blues so sharp
rope around wrist on a one-night tryst

jetlagged or cho[w]king on the mow-low
sunday's still a workday, tijuana fever
by the river looking @ a shelled-side non-spirit
looking back half-empty with conversation
converted to tortured songs or broken
beer bottle or whine glass

cubed things etched by the hands, framed
or, in the hands framed: the kew-bing
lost in trail looking for the cave

the craziest thing you'll ever do
you're weirder than i am

books in shelves meant for elves kneading growth
out of the box and into it by intuition

kite made in the blue book: flown on a delighted stranger's
daylight brasierres flying from a horseless half-a-story carriage
petting the goat's hair in the humdrum of the perky cushions

waist-monkey will be mine
            ;          &nbs p; till it's too dirty to wear around
take its picture before i take it home
            ;          &nbs p; in my low-cost coconut shirt

i oversleep drunk and arrive two hours
too late for the gig where pals are wont to gag me
to death with my finger pointed in the right direction

i could've sung and played guitar in front
of 256 people but ryan's just a kid
and i'll let him know

i have trouble putting my thoughts in order
but i can listen to my rapid eye movement all day
and that's my dirty secret

amongst countless
others of course


written 07/13/08
http://poetrycritical .net/read/888/
thanks, gnormal.
: )
 — fractalcore

oops, the first "torture" there should be replaced with "misshapened".
: )
 — fractalcore

and "etched" should be "sketched".
: )
 — fractalcore

and daylight should be broken with a comma in between.
shucks.
: )
 — fractalcore

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