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Ways of Knowing
ClayManire

I.
 1
And on my left hand you
 2
appear smiling in spite
 3
of the clangor and imminent
 4
threat of the whole
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damned thing collapsing
 6
around us which it could
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very well do. Or maybe
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it has or will again but for now
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there's only your chin
 10
quivering up to a shall we?
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while the man at a nearby
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table sits with his
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cigarillos and clear ideas
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of things as they seem;
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therefore I grasp your hand
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knowing nothing for certain
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except what I know
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in this moment near you
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as you turn your head
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forcing the labials and palatals
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whispering shall we?
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II.
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They sing and sway and laugh and play and love and somehow seem so much above us though much like us, so when they're cuttle-cuttling or sashaying swimming singing or even playing when they're loving is what I'm saying they too must feel a subtle warming behind their ears or else a beating pulsing swarming in their breasts and then the question is do mermaids sweat she said and laughing took his hand in hers and said I wonder yet I wonder yet.
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12 Jul 17

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a nice read. the two voices i and ii work for me, i'm released from the tension into a tip-toe and then twirling, kind of dervish. this is good lyricism, where i feel the author felt and saw the words falling into place.

as poetry, the two parts together make the second part work. you might say -- someone might -- that the heavy first part wasn't necessary, but i think both sides, voices, ways of saying and seeing, seeing of the world, are necessary.
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