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Day In The Sun (song lyric)
Rely

Do not speak to me tonight of the cold
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If I could just reach over touch your arm again
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Besides you had your day in the sun
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And if you want to come along now
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You’d better run
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Just don’t say a word
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You said enough
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The winter sun sitting low in the sky
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makes it hard to see the road ahead
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The time we used to have to stay so far apart
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The time we used to have
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I give it back to you
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Just don’t say a word
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You said enough
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The freedom you allow yourself
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is the freedom you achieve
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And all that you saw in your young self
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is what you wanted to believe
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Another small creature runs into the road
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You have to swerve around to keep from
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running over it remains to be seen where you are
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And when you finally start to come around
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I wont be far
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Just don’t say a word
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You said enough
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Not another word
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You said enough
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12 Aug 17

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slow ballad. but, maybe punk rock sung fast and loud and you can never hear your friend's lyric, and he keeps saying, did you like it...??

slow ballad works. kind of prosy sometimes, but using the music like butter to lubricate the pancake makes it go down.
 — cadmium

It's all about the melody
 — Rely

yo dude, it's cold outside.
 — percocet

It's cold outside.
 — percocet

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