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have you ever heard
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have you ever heard a boy laugh?
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have you ever heard a
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        boy make a sound
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        completely thrilled
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        and uncontained
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have you ever
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heard a boy laugh?
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it's not about some kind of
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meaning or intent breaking
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down an unrestrained noise
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into some kind of conveyance
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of joy or pain or other four
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letter emotions too strong
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to be neatly tied up into
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more urbane
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well mannered expressions
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have you ever heard
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the wailing a boy makes
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when wearing his heart
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on his sleeve, so far down
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the hem of his shirt the
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stitching can't hope to
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contain what's left of his
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blood and bones
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have you ever heard a boy laugh
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?
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13 Oct 17

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Biologically speaking there are no bones in a heart. It's a muscle.

Oh wait, is it 'concept heart?'

There you go...I have heard a boy laugh after all, and it was just then, except it happens to be a female boy. As a matter of fact, a largely unattractive, aging and overweight woman who goes by the bony pump of Polly.

Heart/Bones, Gender/Relevance, let's skip the hello sailor to school together shall we.

Concept hearts for president,
Thanks for the read.
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 — PollyReg

For reference:

have you ever heard
the wailing a boy makes
when wearing his heart
on his sleeve, so far down
the hem of his shirt the
stitching can't hope to
contain what's left of his
blood and bones
 — PollyReg

just to be clear, I am teasing a bit, because I do adore concept hearts...But lets not forget that a heart, on some level, is in fact an organ.

I have no desire to throw a heart a bone for shits and giggles. Never have had the inclination to do so. Its like giving a puppy dog some squid ink. Or a blue jay some tusk.

(?)
 — PollyReg

I think its a shirt hanging over the side of a bed, with the seams unpicked by some sort of vindictive, scissor wielding maniac.

And a third party found an old heart, somewhere, salt-rinsed it so as it had no blood in it, got a hand full of chicken carcus, put both on the shirt, let them slide of the bed, pretending they belonged to the original owner, and then wrote a poem to make the scissor wielding maniac feel shitty and the shirt, subsequently, sorry for itself.

Aunty Polly came along, pretended to be a boy, laughed, and Voila!!!! The poem is realised.

A poetry site full of would-be shirt philanthropists! Except not so.
 — PollyReg

;-)
 — PollyReg

Ah, maybe it's like a 5 year old wearing an xxxl shirt? So his hearts on the floor?

Still, why?

Would that be what? And why? It's a metaphor for something maybe.

I'm still a boy and I am still laughing...but its not clear because its an incident that is not pictured in everyday life.

Maybe you could call it "small heart, next to a cufflink, on a big sleeve, on a floor"
 — PollyReg

reasons to wail # 1 : Having to wear Uncle Jack's shirt, replete with found and rinsed heart, because you rolled down a hill.
 — PollyReg

now I just think its sexist. Why boy and not girl? Why gender at all?

Goodnight,
thanks for the read and play
 — PollyReg

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