Nice. I'd take out the as in line 9.
3 and 4 are uncomfortable. I'm not sure 4 is needed. — akiikii
I really liked this. For how short it was, it was very poetic and hit straight on the awkward, critical moment where something concealed was exposed for the author while being stepped around to be kept out of view from their unloved partner. I'd only condense "she said..asked" into "she asked." Otherwise, quite excellent. — lyrycsyntyme