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why tears don't burn
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because tears are like saline
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and I’m out of alcohol
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only acid botched skin
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and perma-grin
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ferments the heavy
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the dry
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the dead
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and it’s a bonfire
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I can't be part of
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16 May 18

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I like this, but I’d prefer “a bonfire I can’t be part of”.
Just seems more natural to me, as a statement.
Nice poem
 — jenakajoffer

aloha jen,

I think you're right and I've modified.

thankx
 — unknown

Hey! Awesome.
 — jenakajoffer

So fkn clean :)
 — jenakajoffer

bonfire of the vanities  i can't  be part of
 — unknown

thanks for reading and comment unknown.
 — unknown

This is ok for a short piece, but not strong enough to hold on to.
Is it just me, but brings to mind standing too close to the barbecue and trying to juggle the tongues and spatula whilst holding a bottle of beer. And then the flames flare up because of fat dripping on to the coals.
 — matrinh20

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