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DeformedLion

OK so my last poem was a vacant father much like its subject knew,  or hung.
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Gardening makes space pretty for the people,
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And the earth swallows those,
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Last laugh...
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Thanks.
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The one about coffee,  this isn't Friends
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It's the one about how I wake up and how breathing
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Is done. Could be done. Couple coffee and lips
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And then plagiarise the poem I read before this
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Tension.
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Couplet like Juliet,
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Aardvark like hamlet.
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Hammer the poor bae
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To his shit stain and then crisscross
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Hamlets and mountains, fjord
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And flume.
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Countdown the hours
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To when the poem was Ruin.
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.Afterall, a fairytale is something pretty
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And her bruises leap at you
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From the poison on the nightstand
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Or bullets from a teaspoon.
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I can't shake the salt enough
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There isn't any left in the ocean
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But my arms are
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So strong
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And you, my love,
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Could crush nails between thighs
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Mooning the blood
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Or sucking it from cups
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18 Jun 18

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goddamn you!!!

killing it, you're a hardcore soft-gasm, you know nothing yet you know--

i love your mouth, it's blackness at the bottom.
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