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floating here
somewhere between the surreal
and azure sky
waiting for the calm of numb
to replace what now
rubs me thin
you there
without waiting
moved on

25 Jun 18

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nice time-space and spacing, made me read it maybe as you intended it to be heard... ? the existential thing about feeling time moving slow when you're waiting and don't want to wait comes through. the spacing for 'moved on' works for me.
 — cadmium

i love the movement of this poem,  delicate sounds too, and they reverberate through me.  lovely writing.
 — jenakajoffer

enjoyed reading this going with the  flow poem
 — Rossant