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amy

floating here
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somewhere between the surreal
 2
green
 3
and azure sky
 4
 
 
waiting for the calm of numb
 5
to replace what now
 6
rubs me thin
 7
 
 
you there
 8
without waiting
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moved on
 10

25 Jun 18

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nice time-space and spacing, made me read it maybe as you intended it to be heard... ? the existential thing about feeling time moving slow when you're waiting and don't want to wait comes through. the spacing for 'moved on' works for me.
 — cadmium

i love the movement of this poem,  delicate sounds too, and they reverberate through me.  lovely writing.
 — jenakajoffer

enjoyed reading this going with the  flow poem
 — Rossant

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