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Summer Camp
larrylark

Daylight dimmed.
 1
Eyes of the stag head glittered
 2
Beneath antlers
 3
That might take off and fly.
 4
It had rained all day.
 5
They were stuck inside,
 6
Playing games of whispers
 7
Passing time beneath its gaze.
 8
Now bored, one raised his face,
 9
Glancing nervously at the stag,
 10
To see if its lips moved
 11
When whispering.
 12

7 Aug 18

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mysterious poem a change of style
Larry changeover Lark
 — unknown

nice poem overall.  although I might've changed things up a bit in the last three lines.  maybe change "stag" to 'deer' in 10?  and add 'near' to 12? just a few thoughts.  
 — JKWeb

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