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Thou shalt not steal
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the wall
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the clock
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the ceiling
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the mirror
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silence
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all have become you
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you even stole the sun
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and now everyone this morning
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but you
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looks diseased
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Missionary girl
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sunday school
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has enough hypocrites
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and one god or trinity
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is not enough
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tell your pastor
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you've  turned me Hindu
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and don't call me anymore
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i'll be at your shrines
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in the temple, my living room
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worshipping your reincarnations
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placing flowers
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at your feet.
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Thou shalt not worship false idols

3 Sep 18

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One God Jewish or Trinity Christian ?  
 — unknown

nice rewrite. seems more real.
 — cadmium

Let me be real, please.
 — unknown

you want to be real as a sex toy or as a creative person finding your actual way in the world through writing? just sitting and feeling 'real' while you're being kept as a pet isn't going to 'real' you. write and re-write to find your history as it was for you, not as you twisted your emotions to be pliable, back then, for everyone else.
 — cadmium

Uggh, your living room....it’s so good it kills me
 — Seventeen

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